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Balanced Arguments

December 2016.

The last piece of writing by Year 6 is probably the hardest genre of writing they cover. They were asked to write a 'Disucussion' text or a 'Balanced Argument'. This is where they take an issue with divided opinion and lay out the 2 sides of the argument. However, they are not allowed to include their own opinion and the reader must not detect the writer's voice!

 

The issue discussed was 'Should children have their own pets?' Bethan has worked very hard to do this in her writing, also developing a personal target of adding extra detail to any idea in her work. Here, she puts forward the arguments of people who believe yes....

Many people believe that children should have pets; if you are an only child, the pets become company - even pets such as fish and tortoises will keep you company. A further argument is that, it is the child's first responsibility. Caring, feeding and watering their pet is good for the child to understand the routine and commitment in later lifeAlso, they suggest that they should teach the child about death. If the pet was to die after the chld had taken a huge amount of care for it, it would be extremely devastating for the child. They need to learn that - when a pet does die, they are almost ready for it. This way, they will overcome it more quickly than a child that has not prepared for the death.

Well done Bethan - keep up the great progress!

 

Writing Progress!

 

Another very successful HTSW this week, with some great progress with many aspects of writing.

The writers had to create a Comparative Report - comparing and contrasting questionnaire returns from Mrs Aartsen and Mr Field.

Bailey made great progress with his vocabulary. The following words were used when less impressive ones were more obvious;

luxurious   destination  vacations  replies  dehydration   designed

Well done Bailey!

Look at Jack's use of the semi-colon, the way he quotes one of the answers in the questionnaire and how he uses brackets to add further information in this super sentence:

The final similarity is that both teachers were ill on holiday; Mr Field was ill in Cyprus (he 'didn't drink enough water') and Mr Aartsen was ill in the Lake Districk (UK).

Well done Jack!

Finally, look at Harrison's use of introductory phrases in these sentences. He also uses brackets for extra information, possessive apostrophes, adverbs to vary the beginning of his sentences, challenging vocabulary and commas to separate his clauses...

Also, another interesting difference is that, although they both have been to Spain and the USA, different countries have been selected for the most expensive travel. Mr Field's favourite wildlife was negative ( he didn't like the bullfighting and birds in cages). On the other hand, Mrs Aartsen's was positive (she saw dolphins and an octopus).

Well done Harrison!

Year 6 Personification Poetry

Year 6 have just completed a short unit on Personification Poetry, where they read many poems which described objects and animals as if they had human feelings, actions, thoughts, speech and questions. After practising, they turned their attention to the small oak tree in the playground, which was planted to celebrate the school's centenary. After considering the tree's personification, they worked in pairs to create a short verse. They spent much time editing, considering different words, line breaks and punctuation. I'm sure you will agree the end result is stunning. Well done Year 6; another triumph!

Little Oak 100

 

As he giggled and played with the rushing wind,

He did not feel understood; he was younger

Wanting the other trees to respect his significance.

And how proud he was

Representing something special.

Autumn comes; happiness comes with it,

“I love Autumn,” the tree would shout.

But he did feel special.

And he was!

 

Paige and Dyllon

 

At first, excited to be new;

Responsibilities, making friends, a brand new life,

Impatient to get out, I burst through the surface,

Not even realising my leaves hadn’t grown,

Looking around Big Oak, Apple Twins and Leafy

Laughing at me, all of them,

Humiliation kicking,

A leaf shed

Quietly.

 

Harrison and Alysa

 

 

 

 

 

 

Roots push down,

Down past wriggling worms,

Branches wanting up,

Sunshine desire.

I wonder if the weird figures

Dig me up?

 

Alice and Jack

 

 

 

 

Little tree fidgeting

With too much excitement to hold in,

Impatient to explore his wonderful future.

“What will I see?

What will I learn?

How will I grow?” he wonders,

He waves to his BTFs (best trees forever)

Waving branches returned

To the little tree with a big heart -

A tree of Celebration.

 

Bailey and Rosie

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I feel cold,

Alone,

My friends staring at me

With their warm coats on.

There are mushrooms growing around me.

I thought I was special;

I’m not.

I’m just a silly little tree.

 

Daisy and Elwira

 

 

 

Watching the children,

Running and Jumping,

He feels ganged-up on;

Left out.

Feels proud and glad to be

Where he is,

But still doesn’t know his speciality,

Just like a prince.

 

Bethan and Jasper

 

 

 

 

 

I’m lonely,

Other trees tower above me

And make fun of my size.

Autumn leaves hit me,

I cry; they laugh again.

One thing I adore -

Watching children play.

I’m just attached to a wooden pole, some string

Can’t wait until I am big,

I can finally fit in.

 

Jasmine and Courtney

 

Shivering with cold,

Sad, dry, brown leaves fall to the grass.

No leafy jumper anymore.

“When will I grow into my beautiful new green leaves?” she wants to know,

“Don’t touch my precious leaves,” she shouts,

As the children kick them, remembering her many warm leaves

Admired by all.

Redzheb

 

Year 6 give advice!

PGL Advice for Year 5.

Hey Year 6! What a wonderful opportunity you have been given. Next year, you will be on your way to PGL in the Autumn Term.

 Activities

At PGL, you do lot of activities. Here are some of the activities we did:

 *Abseiling *The Giant Swing *RaftBuilding 

 *Zip Wire  *Trapeze *Archery

When you do abseiling, your harness will be checked 3 times and all of the clips get checked. You will never be forced to do anything you don’t want to do.

 PGL Staff

When you are at PGL, you are always with an adult.

The staff, who are extremely nice, will support you when you are doing any activity. They check everything before you go on the equipment. When you are scared, it makes the activity even more exciting. Your leader will be really helpful. Our leader, who was called Cameron, came and played football with us. The staff will be wearing PGL coat or jumper.

 Encouragement

Your friends will always be supporting you and cheering you on. The PGL staff never force you to do anything; you don’t have to do anything you don’t want to do. Even if you get to the top of the abseiling tower, you just walk back down the ladders.

If you have any concerns, come and speak to myself or any other Year 6.

 Alice

Well done to Alice for such a well-written piece of work in this month's HomeTalkSchoolWrite. She has worked hard to include:

* Several sentences beginning with a subordinate clause

* A very engaging opener - Year 5 will be hooked into reading.

* Bullet points introduced with a semi-colon.

* A semi-colon

* A closer, which  engages the reader and looks to the future, in terms of more support for Year 5.

Well done Alice.